2011년 1월 11일 화요일

Revising Paragraph

Before
[11am]Wednesday's Assignment.
I think about Wednesday's Assignment
Face Shape is related characteristic imformation....
I say to everywon "No"
My face is round face
but, there isn't thin lip,and there isn't a flat ear, and a wide nose isn't
What face shape is related characteristic imformation is error this of hasty generalization
(An error of the inductive method)
Some people is related characteristic imformation
but, Most people aren't related
You try to think for a while about surrounding people
It is thing this for related people to more have a lot of the people whom they see it, and wasn't
People related characteristic imformation is partly of all people
Therefore, I think that Face Shape isn't related characteristic imformation

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Change
[11am]Wednesday's Assignment
Face shape is related to characteristic information. I say to everyone, "No".
My face is round, but I don't have thin lips, or flat ears or a wide nose. Relating
face shapes with characteristic information is an error of hasty generalization. some
people's characteristic information is related to face shape. but, Most people aren't
related. You try to think for a while about surrounding people. people whose face
shape is related characteristic information is part of all people. Therefore, I think
that face shape isn't related to characteristic information.

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